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Cold dirt to
Cold marble to
Cold steel.
Iron on iron,
Glass on glass,
Rising higher, ever higher
Higher than nature's best towers.
The ancient redwoods
And cold mountains of snow
Can't compare.
The crystalline shoot grows
As man "improves" on nature.
Silver leaves
Spiral, spiral,
Blocking out the sun,
With paltry greenery to liven them.
The cold, hard tower thrusts
Into the cold, hard sky.
Nature has been formed into
The aesthetic of tech;
A corset of alloys
Restricting her breath,
Her growth,
Her life.
The metal pierces her lungs.
Her breath grows sluggish.
And.
Eventually.
Stops.
Cold marble to
Cold steel.
Iron on iron,
Glass on glass,
Rising higher, ever higher
Higher than nature's best towers.
The ancient redwoods
And cold mountains of snow
Can't compare.
The crystalline shoot grows
As man "improves" on nature.
Silver leaves
Spiral, spiral,
Blocking out the sun,
With paltry greenery to liven them.
The cold, hard tower thrusts
Into the cold, hard sky.
Nature has been formed into
The aesthetic of tech;
A corset of alloys
Restricting her breath,
Her growth,
Her life.
The metal pierces her lungs.
Her breath grows sluggish.
And.
Eventually.
Stops.
Well, hell. I opened up my journal to write today, and found this. Which I don't really remember writing, but it's in my handwriting, in my journal, sooo... yeah. 
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I like the historical progression of the beginning: "cold dirt to cold marble to cold steel." It gives the reader a picture of different time periods and the subsequent development of technology used in the different periods. The word "cold" in front of each word makes it sound like everything is dead, which is probably the effect you were going for.
I also am a big fan of the phrase "a corset of alloys." It puts a vivid picture in my mind.
I also am a big fan of the phrase "a corset of alloys." It puts a vivid picture in my mind.